My
Dream House
House is the place to stay together
with part of our family. A good house is the house that makes the dweller fells
so comfortable. My dream house is the house that has complete facility and wide
garden. I want to try my best to get my dream house in my future later on.
Actually, my dream house is so
simple to make if I have a lot of money. Because I ‘m Balinese, I will build my
house use Bali style because I am proud as Balinese, it means I respect Bali
culture as my culture. In the first floor of my house I want to have six
bedrooms, one bedroom for my parents, one bedroom for me, and the other bedroom
for my children later on. In every bedroom I want to have complete furniture
and facilities such as there are bathrooms, table, chair, television, etc. In
every bathroom there are complete facilities such as shower, the thing that use
to organize temperature of the water so that I enjoy when take a bath. In the
kitchen of my house I want to have complete facilities such as refrigerator to
put the foods, vegetable, meat, eggs, cold drink, etc, the stove to cook
everyday and the other facility.
In the second floor of my house I
will make a big living room, the purpose just as a place together with part of
my family. In every side of the second floor there are many windows, the
purpose just so that I can enjoy the view from the second floor. In the right
side of my house I will make a wide garden filled with complete kind of fruits.
Behind of my house I will make swimming pool and small football yard. Because
my hobby is playing football I will use that yard to play football together
with my friends after work, my life cannot be separated from football. If we
already get a lot of sweet we will swim together. Have you ever imagined to have
your dream house? I think you will enjoy your daily activity at home and that
is like heaven of world. I know to make my dream house will not be easy for me
because it needs a lot of money , to get a lot of money the first thing that
should I do is I must be successful. I want to make my family, friends, and the
other that I love proud to me.
“Home
sweet home” is a word that really could express your feeling to have such a
great house. My dream house is the house
that makes me and my family feels comfortable; enjoy the situation, and safe.
Although just small house it can be my dream house for me because the most
important things for me is togetherness with part of my family. Luxury
house is not always comfortable for me.
I agree with your statement May, which is the luxury house is not always comfortable.
ReplyDeleteactually your writing is already good but remember in using punctuation on the right place on your writing.
thank you. ImI
Thank you very much Ery
ReplyDeleteI think you can share about Balinese style house with Ery and Arni because I have read their writing about Balinese house. I agree that the good house can make all family comfortable and enjoy in house. I interested that you will build swimming pool and small football because you need wide yard and not common in our society in Bali. I think you need attention in usage comma in sentences.
ReplyDeleteHave a nice day may...
Ooooooo great idea beautiful
DeleteI agree with you and ery, a luxury house is not always compertable. A House must be compertable, so you can feel happy live there. About your writing, in my opinion you have to give more emphasise in your writing.In the third paragraph you talking abou two different things, in the begening you talking about your second floor and end of paragraph you talking about outside of your house. You can sparate those two things become two more paragraph. It will make your writing more clear and interesting.
ReplyDeletewell May, actually your dream house is great, even you imagine that you want to have Balinese style house. that is very interesting for Balinese people, and I can feel so. :)
ReplyDeletefor your writing, I am sorry May, I found some inappropriate terms, such as "home sweet home" I think this is not a word May, perhaps it should be a phrase, and in third sentence in last paragraph I found "the most important things", I suppose it should be "the most important thing". One more thing May, I want to ask question, which one is your thesis statement, is it in first paragraph or the last one? :)
Sumer, Actually my thesis statement in first paragraph, I'm lazy to change that because this writing already rated by the lecture. I think it's not useful if I change it to be better. Thanks
ReplyDeletethank you Dewa. I'm sorry I have my own way to make my writing to be interesting, although it different to the other, include you.
ReplyDeleteHe .. He
after reading your story, my statement may be almost the same as ery, because it does not guarantee a luxurious home comfort for families who live in it.
ReplyDeleteafter reading you story that about your dream house I'm happy for you . you got a simple dream house not like I . I wish you make it
ReplyDeletethank you ;)
ReplyDeleteA good house is the house that makes the dweller feels (not fells) comfortable.
ReplyDeletethe four walls and a roof does not make it a house. It is more about the feelings, relationships, Warmth of relations etc all that count, and your KARMA, which will identify you in eyes of others- that means they will keep you alive in their memory. Even without "house" people have few of their close friends or so to say, people who feel close to these people. They are rich. Happiness is a temporary phenomenon.
ReplyDeleteover all it is a nice writing- a dream house- that remains a dream for ever.........Keep on dreaming. Sarve Bhavantu Sukhina Sarve Niramayah... Let all people live happily all be healthy- This is the prayer in SANSKRIT, passed on through centuries in our land....
kindly correct your punctuation
ReplyDeletekindly correct your punctuation
ReplyDeleteafter reading you story that about you dream house im happy for you yougot a simple dreme house not like.i wish you make it ;)
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ReplyDeleteEveryone has a dream of his dream home and your idea of dream home is also nice.
it 's too long for me
ReplyDeleteThank you for your writting. I hope you can have a dream home in the future
ReplyDeletethank you;)
ReplyDeleteThat's actually really very helpful... 🙂
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ReplyDeleteAwsome essay this really helped me out alot and this essay is amazing
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